Homework 15/08 YARRAMAN

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Re: Homework 15/08 YARRAMAN

Post by Bob Pacey » Fri Aug 05, 2011 1:35 pm

Yep Sue rhymes ok for me, Don't ask me about metre though.


The one's I do not like are those feminine rhymes ???????



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Re: Homework 15/08 YARRAMAN

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Fri Aug 05, 2011 2:21 pm

laaf. baaf. chaff. staff - all sound the bloody same to me Heather :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: Please explain - maybe Victorians don't tork propa :?
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Re: Homework 15/08 YARRAMAN

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Fri Aug 05, 2011 2:21 pm

whoops I hiccuped :oops:
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Re: Homework 15/08 YARRAMAN

Post by mummsie » Fri Aug 05, 2011 7:37 pm

Thanks Terry, Bob, Leonie and Heather for your feedback. Wow, It's great to see so many people having a go at this one. I'm finding this part of the forum so helpful with my writing,and really appreciate the feedback from everyone. :) :)
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Re: Homework 15/08 YARRAMAN

Post by Terry » Fri Aug 05, 2011 8:06 pm

Hi Sue,
There is no doubt you can learn quite a bit here if you're interested.

G/day Bob,
I missed your post re the gold in that area, sounds interesting mate.

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Re: Homework 15/08 YARRAMAN

Post by Heather » Fri Aug 05, 2011 9:09 pm

Maureen! You duffer, put your hearing aid in!

laugh ends in a ffff sound -you use your teeth on your lips to make this sound

chaff ends in a ffff sound

staff ends in a ffff sound

bath ends in a th sound you put your tongue between your teeth to make this sound!

See, it's all to do with the teeth!!! Maybe you don't have your teeth in - that could be the problem! :lol:
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Re: Homework 15/08 YARRAMAN

Post by mummsie » Fri Aug 05, 2011 9:22 pm

What is it about Fridays, people start having problems with their teeth!!!!Last week it was Bob and Bill, now Maureens having problems with her chompers. :lol: :lol:
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Re: Homework 15/08 YARRAMAN

Post by Zondrae » Fri Aug 05, 2011 9:33 pm

pppsssttt! Heather,

I think Maureen was making a funny.

and Sue,

To my ear those two pairs do rhyme. What they look like has no bearing, it is the sound that makes the rhyme in this case.
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Re: Homework 15/08 YARRAMAN

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Fri Aug 05, 2011 10:21 pm

OK Heather I get it - teeth or no teeth. Are you saying they ain't a rhyme???? because ones a th word and the others are fff words - if you say they aren't I think I am going to have to give the whole game away :lol: :o or go for elocution lessons.

Now Bob why are you having problems with feminine rhymes? Girl/twirl - Lady/shady, wimmen/swimmen, chick/flick

Can't see a problem at all :lol:
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Re: Homework 15/08 YARRAMAN

Post by Heather » Fri Aug 05, 2011 10:56 pm

Yay Maureen. ffff and th are NOT rhymes!!! Don't feel bad because I only realised that after I had used them in a poem - (some time ago I hasten to add) and then couldn't find another rhyme so had to leave it :x Totally ruined my rhyming poem but I wasn't changing it for quids...

On that note it might be time to retire for the night.. 15 year old daughter is out - there is a "boy" on the scene. I had hoped it wouldn't happen so soon :roll: So I have to sit up and wait for the midnight chimes for Cinderella to come home.
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