Homework 15/8 Bitter Sweet Memories Of Yarraman

[Neville Briggs]

I thought that was a good one Terry.

I'll be picky, the past tense of choose is chosen ( if you use the word had ), so it would be better if you could think of another one syllable word that means the same. Maybe get rid of had. But.....I think "poetic licence' allows us to stretch and squeeze the words, so maybe, just maybe, you can get away with had chose if you really want to .

See .....writing poetry is not easy, as some try to believe.

[Bob Pacey]

No Nev. Writing poetry has always been easy. writing poetry correctly is the hard part.


To each their own so long as we enjoy what we do the outcome is the same.

Bob

[Terry]

G/day Neville,
Yes I did consider that, if it had been a for a comp I would have had to use something else,
not that this is an excuse, as I believe you should always try to get it right regardless.
I did wonder if anyone would ping me for it and I'm glad you did, because this is where some people
hope to learn a bit about the correct way to write bush poetry.

Thanks mate,

Terry

[Neville Briggs]

Terry , I think it's just a matter of matching the sentences in the poem with the usual pattern of contemporary speech. Not really about rules or right and wrong.
Presumably we want our sentences to be clear and understood, and if there is something not quite fitting, there is the risk of not being understood. that's all I meant.
I'm still working on mine

Bob, I'll shout you a few drinks one day and explain why writing poetry is hard.
The only easy part is typing the words onto the paper ( or screen ).

[Terry]

Hi Neville,
I knew what you meant and agree with you, if you get it right it just adds to the pleasure of reading a poem or anything for that matter, mind you it's a constant struggle isn't it.

Cheers Terry

[Bob Pacey]

Just send me the tab care off the Sailing Club at Yeppoon Nev I have the drinks and try to work it out myself.



Bob

[Maureen K Clifford]

I have similar problems with tense Terry and get things in a tangle so you are not on your Pat Malone there - woukd this work perhaps


He now recalls just how he felt when love had passed him by;
his Nelly chose another. That was hurt he can’t deny.

Cheers

Maureen

[Terry]

I really like that Maureen,

I've got hooked on this subject and will soon be posting another chapter of the story. It's a back to the future sort of thing and deals with when he meets Nellie.

That will only leave the middle bit for some future date, maybe?

Terry