ABPA - Australian Bush Poets Association

Thanks Marty, having a play around with metre with this one.

Heather

G'day Heather, love this eh! though I found it a bit 'jerky' in places when tapping my finger to the beat rule.

Hi Dave, good to see you back. I thought you might have been washed away up there. Did you have a good holiday?

I wrote A Soldier's Son Was Born Today with three stanzas but wanted to extend it and couldn't get it happening at the time. I tried extending it yesterday but what I wrote didn't seem to fit so I ended up with something new.

This poem has two soft beats in the 2nd and 4th line of each stanza so it won't follow the dum de dum rhythm. I found it rather tricky to do. I still think it needs a bit of polishing.

Heather

No worries Heather, we are fine in Cairns, no flooding here (yet) our 'wet' season is about to begin. Our 'break' was enjoyable spending time with the grandkids.

I see what you mean about the 2 soft beats, that is where I was having trouble.

Good one Heather. I think that the way you have varied the metre is very suitable for the mood of the words and the theme.
To me it makes a sort of drum beat every second line in keeping with the mood of the military funeral.

Unfortunately it looks like there will be plenty more material on this theme.


Neville

Dave we all have to take turns at being flooded you know - well that is how it seems this past few months. Not that I would wish it on anyone. Rockhampton is really having a hard time of it. It must be such a helpless feeling. I've heard from Kym and she is high and dry which is a relief.

Thanks Neville. I've made a few minor changes and (think) I am happy with it now - a woman always reserves the right to change her mind! This one was also inspired by the loss of Lance Corporal Jared Mackinney.

Heather