A Soldier

[Heather]

[Heather]

Thanks Marty, having a play around with metre with this one.

Heather

[David J Delaney]

G'day Heather, love this eh! though I found it a bit 'jerky' in places when tapping my finger to the beat rule.

[Heather]

Hi Dave, good to see you back. I thought you might have been washed away up there. Did you have a good holiday?

I wrote A Soldier's Son Was Born Today with three stanzas but wanted to extend it and couldn't get it happening at the time. I tried extending it yesterday but what I wrote didn't seem to fit so I ended up with something new.

This poem has two soft beats in the 2nd and 4th line of each stanza so it won't follow the dum de dum rhythm. I found it rather tricky to do. I still think it needs a bit of polishing.

Heather

[David J Delaney]

No worries Heather, we are fine in Cairns, no flooding here (yet) our 'wet' season is about to begin. Our 'break' was enjoyable spending time with the grandkids.

I see what you mean about the 2 soft beats, that is where I was having trouble.

[Neville Briggs]

Good one Heather. I think that the way you have varied the metre is very suitable for the mood of the words and the theme.
To me it makes a sort of drum beat every second line in keeping with the mood of the military funeral.

Unfortunately it looks like there will be plenty more material on this theme.


Neville

[Heather]

Dave we all have to take turns at being flooded you know - well that is how it seems this past few months. Not that I would wish it on anyone. Rockhampton is really having a hard time of it. It must be such a helpless feeling. I've heard from Kym and she is high and dry which is a relief.

Thanks Neville. I've made a few minor changes and (think) I am happy with it now - a woman always reserves the right to change her mind! This one was also inspired by the loss of Lance Corporal Jared Mackinney.

Heather