The catafalque party

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Maureen K Clifford
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Re: The catafalque party

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Fri Nov 11, 2011 11:40 am

Marty it is beautiful I love it.

Can I comment on the line
their arms are reversed , coffin draped in a shroud
I know exactly what you mean and I am not having a go and it is I know my sense of the ridiculous but I have this vision of arms being on back to front. The naval term all hands on deck cracks me up in a similar fashion even though I know it to be correct terminology, I always wonder why they only want the hands..

Further on in the poem you used the term 'weapons reversed' would rifles reversed perhaps work as well???

If it is only me who gets this picture I apologize in advance :oops: but I hasten to add that I think it an outstanding piece of poetry and I am not trying to detract from the seriousness of it in any way.

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Re: The catafalque party

Post by Heather » Fri Nov 11, 2011 11:48 am

Good one Marty. Strange where a little bit of research leads to isn't it? ;)

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Re: The catafalque party

Post by Dave Smith » Sat Nov 12, 2011 12:27 am

Martyboy wrote:Arms reveresed is the correct terminology , it is a tradition that predates rifles but I guess weapons reversed works as well
I am afraid that I disagree when talking about weaponry in a military situation a soldier is armed.
I once marched as a lone drummer in a catafalque party with a draped drum and the commands given were reverse arms and shoulder arms and I believe it should remain so.

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Re: The catafalque party

Post by Neville Briggs » Sat Nov 12, 2011 1:06 pm

I didn't notice anything bothersome in the technical terms, I thought the poem was good enough not to worry about that. Pretty good effort Marty, a sombre theme, but true to life.
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